Riley Kovatch
English 1A
Servais
12/03/08
Cell Phone Use Effects Us All
Human beings are not solitary creatures; we are animals who seek company and companionship from others within the species. Without interaction, we never would have learned anything beyond what instinct mandates. People need each other to learn language, education, etiquette, and every thing else that is part of this world. But how much interaction is too much? Modern technology allows us to contact any person, at any time, as long as they have the necessary gadgets. Emails, cell phone calls, and text messages are all examples of ways people can instantly communicate. Computer communication has become very prominent in our society, but is still far overshadowed by the use of cellular telephones. Cell phones have taken the world by storm, planting themselves in the pockets of whoever can afford them. They are used by a large number of people, from seven year old children, who can barely read the screen, to seventy year old seniors who can barely read the screen. Cell phones have drastically changed the world as we know it.
Text messaging is a growing venue of communication amongst everyone in the wireless community. It is easy to type a couple words in, hit send, and not have to worry about the face to face awkwardness that actual interaction creates. These short messages are good for many things, like when one only needs to tell somebody a couple words, or does not have time to make a call, they can send a quick text. As with many things on this earth, the good aspects of cellular phones are equaled, or possibly surpassed by the negative. Although the casual uses of texting are acceptable, text messages are “being used as very important instruments to overcome the uncertainty teenagers usually feel when they want to confront someone with romantic intentions” (Clonen, 3). This is the part that is extremely scary. Adolescents are learning to deal with their emotional troubles via text messaging. The face to face interaction in awkward situations such as breaking up, asking someone out, and arguing, is slowly becoming obsolete. Experiencing these types of situations is critical to the emotional and social development of young minds, and if they become a thing of the past, people will not be able to deal with each other.
Nowadays, people are able to contact anybody they know, at any given time.
1 comment:
1. Cell phones are both good and bad, but the positive qualities over rule the bad.
2. What evidence is cited to prove and support the writer’s thesis? You've got a good quote that develops your 1st body paragraph.
3. Is the writer’s reasoning/critical thinking provided to explain how the evidence proves and supports the thesis? Yes. Totally.
4. Does the writer address counter-claims in the essay? Does the writer effectively refute the counter with evidence and reasoning? You address the good and bad aspects. So far so good.
5. What else could the writer cite as evidence in this essay? Pff, i dunno. Maybe use personal examples to make certain points.
6. What counter-claims still need to be addressed? I have a feeling you'll get to them. I can't think of any.
Is there any other feedback you want to share? You have a really good start, especially the intro paragraph. It was funny too. I smell an A.
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